Very exciting story! I am already really invested in the story you have so far. The writing is very easy to read and effective, as well as comical. Maybe consider adding images to break up large text blocks. Great start!
The story you have is very compelling, I liked how it was written and I think the stopwatch variable was a good idea implemented well. I would just like to see an ending, or at least a way to get back to the start page from a to be continued page, and maybe some images or text styling.
I love the writing! It is both funny and thrilling. I think the way you weave the timer mechanic into the writing is very skillful, and a great demonstration of the value of tools like Twine for interactive fiction writting. I think the story could be longer, but I can see why you ended it here. What's really necessary to fulfill the requirements right now is at least one piece of original art. Other than that, solid stuff! It was great to play this :)
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Very exciting story! I am already really invested in the story you have so far. The writing is very easy to read and effective, as well as comical. Maybe consider adding images to break up large text blocks. Great start!
The story you have is very compelling, I liked how it was written and I think the stopwatch variable was a good idea implemented well. I would just like to see an ending, or at least a way to get back to the start page from a to be continued page, and maybe some images or text styling.
I love the writing! It is both funny and thrilling. I think the way you weave the timer mechanic into the writing is very skillful, and a great demonstration of the value of tools like Twine for interactive fiction writting. I think the story could be longer, but I can see why you ended it here. What's really necessary to fulfill the requirements right now is at least one piece of original art. Other than that, solid stuff! It was great to play this :)
Good story with many choices but you should really add some images in the game.